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Comments for 'The Rescue, Code Name: Keyes'



some help
4:18 pm | December 30, 2002
the battle may be fast but in writing desciption is key, the longer the better. you could spend 2 pages on five minuters of the story.
ThreadedAce3
2:55 am | December 30, 2002
to fast, and some typos. use more detail and you could have an ok story
el_halo_diablo
6:58 pm | December 26, 2002
Ok you coulda explained that story in a little more detail, instead of going a mile a minute.


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