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Comments for 'The Moral Redemption of Dr. Halsey'



Ross
5:28 pm | February 22, 2004
You're an observant chap aren't you Jamirus99?

Yeah I do actually have quite a few fics under my belt, under a certain alias ;]

The reason I'm using my real name is because... well, wait six weeks and I may have an answer. In the mean time, good comments will be a boon for my situation! :)

See if you can't find out what name I was submitting fiction in before.

Clue: Tony the Tiger is a registered ---------.
The abrevation for that word is the abreviation for my old alias.

(Yeah I know- who cares?)
Jamirus99
3:54 pm | February 22, 2004
Ooooh, Ross writing some fanfics. I am SO there. Very good ,looking good, can't wait for more!
CoLd BlooDed
7:25 pm | February 21, 2004
I like your writing style, very good, but it was a little short, make it longer next time. And listen to MCC, don't screw up.
Nick Kang
6:02 pm | February 21, 2004
Woah that was ar better than my writing, and I like the way 343GS can hear the Floods' thoughts.
Tank
1:27 pm | February 21, 2004
I really enjoyed that. It's like Eric Nylund's writing.
Jink
11:24 pm | February 20, 2004
I liked it, it was short, however. That wasn't so bad. The title was definitely promising, and there were minor punctuation mistakes and such. Also, it would help if you indented each new line of dialogue instead of every new paragraph or paragraph series. It just makes the reading go more smoothly. Cheers.
Mind_Affecting_Parasite
2:50 pm | February 20, 2004
That was good, I like the Flood aspect. I guess I've always had an interest in those guys. Creepy.

-MAP
IAmDelta
6:15 am | February 20, 2004
Very good. As MCC said, watch out, but please continue writing, as this was quite engaging. Could have been longer without being harder to read. I especially enjoyed the last portion with 343. It was perfectly in character, although how is he talking to the flood? Or is he just insane enough to think he is? Whatever. Keep up the good work.
blind_snowman
8:21 pm | February 19, 2004
You've got quite a professional writing style, not bogged down with too much description and plenty of dialogue to keep the setting snappy and interesting.

Tres good!
MC's Cousin
3:15 pm | February 19, 2004
That was interesting. But I warn you, you are trying to tell a story about a main plot line that will probably be in Halo 2. FanFic is about that lkind of thing, but still, be carefull where you go with your writing.

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