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Comments for 'Hit Hard Ch. 2 -- Global Defense --'



The Author
4:07 am | February 14, 2004
Yeah I know it sucks. I guess I just wasn't in the right 'writing mood'. I started out really eager to start ch. 2 of the series and then as I started typing I just got less motivated.
MC's Cousin
12:00 pm | February 12, 2004
Well, it's good and all...but there are a couple of things. Split that up and add some bigger details and events. All I read was one big battle sequence. Now while I LOVE battes as much as the next guy, that one wasn't what I would have hoped for. Like I said, get some more Big and Small details in their, split it up into defined paragraphs and add a little more dialouge. Do it and it'll be better (and way to many "abouts").

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