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Comments for 'Revolution 2 Return of the Forerunner Part 5: Last Freedom'



gruntkiller
8:14 pm | December 3, 2002
oh well i was rushed to get a story on the net after i fixed my computor, the next couple will be better
Sarge
9:09 pm | December 2, 2002
Okay... The writing is okay and the idea is good but your story is lacking a lot of bulk it is rather short and doesn't really say all that much. And what leader tells his troops to wait tell all of them are out of their dropship??? You could kill them as they came out. Anyway your ideas are good but work on adding adjectives and giving your story some more bulk.
Covert
5:06 pm | December 2, 2002
Come online more often because I've got LOADS of new ideas for stories.
gruntkiller
9:27 pm | December 1, 2002
thanks im almost done the next one
Fallen Heros
2:48 am | December 1, 2002
Hey I read your story and I noticed an improvement from your beginning (A big one)
gruntkiller
7:52 pm | November 29, 2002
good to let you know im not dead, the reason for my absence was a problem with the computor which took a while to fix but now that im back i should be sending in the next chapter in a day or two
Covert
6:56 pm | November 29, 2002
Pretty short but at least we now know gruntkiller isn't dead. I was almost certain u were. It'd be pretty sweat if u came on hotmail once in a while every one reading this feel free to add me and maybe we can give you some help with your stories specops_elite@hotmail.com


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