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Comments for 'My life as a Marine: Michael A. Mendez'



Jessica
6:30 am | July 16, 2004
Alright, i take it that you're new...nobody comes into HBO a n00b, they come into HBO a newb. You jsut becomre a n00b when you spaz out at people because of somthing they said....If you stay calm, and listen to the constructive critism people give you, you'll stay a newb, and eventually move on to become a btter author, and have more "Fame" on HBO...

Jess
Red Ghost
11:47 am | July 15, 2004
Hey, with a little work, that can be awesome. If everyone considers you a nOOb, then I'm a nOOb too. Yeah, just read my Project Eden. It's crap! Haha! Well, anyways, you have potential...
MC's Cousin
7:46 pm | July 14, 2004
Well my attention ran out in the middle of the last paragraph.
You nee to use the code. Need to use variety in using words. Need to watch your grammar and spelling.
Also, you need work on details. It was droning, and went by too fast.
Overall, just work on it, type it up on your computer and paste it on the submission form.

Ugg, I'm almost tired of this kind of thing.

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