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Comments for 'Slow to Perfection (part 2)'



James Kinsella
7:44 pm | April 15, 2003
Wow, it took forever to read. It was worth the effort though. You need to indent, and I saw a few grammatical errors, but in a story that long what the hell. Keep it up.
Shadow Spartan
5:54 pm | April 15, 2003
same as your other one, 9/10, really good (indent) still great though


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