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Sentinel
10:36 pm | March 22, 2004
Finally back online! After so long it's back online! I really don't do anything but this in my free time.

Like I said before Awacar, great!

Anyway, I live in Texas, and it's as HOT AS HELL!
CoLd BlooDed
5:15 am | March 11, 2004
Canada's great, for me anyways, the weather sucks, but the places you can go are awesome. I love it here by the ocean.
Awacar
1:38 pm | March 10, 2004
Chill out, CoLd, that's not necessary, I know how much of a pain school can be. BTW, how is it in Canada? I have to admit that I don't know especially much about the country.

JJigg, I still thing you're lying...

And Kyle, you're forgiven, don't everyone want people to look at their work?
Kyle
12:49 pm | March 10, 2004
I'm not much of a critic when it comes to poetry, but BRAVO!! Nicely done, Awacar. Btw I'm starting another new series that chronicles a marine squadron's lives on Halo after having evacuated the PoA. Hope y'all like it.

Hmm...why am I advertising my own fic in another person's comments section? Oh well, not as bad as site advertising.

-Kyle, webmaster, Kyle's Gaming Zone (KGZ, www.freewebs.com/kgz. Forums, guestbook, fanfics, reviews, and much much more...)

d'oh!!
CoLd BlooDed
11:33 pm | March 9, 2004
Hope mine was satisfactory...

I live in Canada, Awacar, and I've only read a little of the chapter you sent me, I've been incredibly busy (school, ARGH!) and writing my own stories, so I'll get on that immediately. :)
A.P.N JJiggssaw
8:55 pm | March 9, 2004
Poems in general; quite a few bad poems end up on HBO and usually poems don't seem intersting. This did.
Awacar
5:05 pm | March 9, 2004
Nope, Sweden.

And, BTW, have you read the second chapter that I sent you, CoLd?
CoLd BlooDed
3:49 pm | March 9, 2004
Do you live in the US? Canada? :P
A Puzzle named JJiggssaw
12:31 pm | March 9, 2004
Not bad at all. I don't usually like poems; this was a true exception. Nice work.
Awacar
6:51 am | March 9, 2004
DAAAMMN! Scott, I think you're right. Doing something like that in the title... horrible.

I hate not being born in the US...

JJigg, am I supposed to believe that? Do you compare to the others on HBO or the ones you find other places(school?)? That comment seems too good to be true.

Thank you all, I am grateful.
Scott D
1:23 am | March 9, 2004
The only thing wrong is that "Decepted" is not a word. I think you meant Deceived. But it's good, I like it
Sentinel
10:09 pm | March 8, 2004
Heh. Nice work Awacar. I couldn't do better.

And it seems that you know how to exactly "practice" your work.
9/10
Thomas Harper
9:51 pm | March 8, 2004
nice i liked it alot. keep it up.
Thomas Harper
9:51 pm | March 8, 2004
long.... but good it was different than all the other poems that i have read but it was still good. =:)
Awacar
8:12 pm | March 8, 2004
Thanks, people, these comments make me warm.
gamer02
8:01 pm | March 8, 2004
Excellent.

Anything that can enthrall the reader like it did me is worthy of the highest praise.

Practice or not - it was very good.
ToFu
7:02 pm | March 8, 2004
Wow such a long poem, but I like indeed keep it up!
CoLd BlooDed
3:58 pm | March 8, 2004
Beautiful, man, great job.

"You led us into war, cold bloody war."

That was almost my name! :D

Only one thing, if you were trying to rhyme it was choppy and didn't work in some places.

It was still great, though. :D
Awacar
1:59 pm | March 8, 2004
Any critisism you have, please tell me, so that I can get better next time(I'm in need of an improvement on poems).

Anyway, this poem was a little "excercise" in my skill of portraiting the horrors of war. Tell me of my success, please.


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