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Comments for 'Eve Part 1'



TheRedFaction
3:49 am | March 8, 2003
That was pretty darn good. Despite those few minor errors, that story was short, but interesting. It wasn't a good cliffhanger, but interesting. (hey, is this going to carry on all night??) Yeah so it was good. Happy day, happy day.

Overall Rating: 8.5/10 (For being a little short)

Keep more coming!!

TheRedFaction
saturn
7:20 am | November 11, 2002
hummm.worked up. lets unleash our rage on the grunts....
Silent Giant
3:56 am | November 6, 2002
darn, I was so worked up about thattoo bad
saturn
1:50 am | November 6, 2002
and one thing i forgot. meaning that "the message board is not ur mom". means that u dont nhave to listen to me (im addressing the author). now the time thing is nothing, so les ALL forget about it. notthing personal here. we should get along, after all we're all halo fanatics (at least i am), meaning we have a common interest, ya?
saturn
1:50 am | November 6, 2002
i purposely put the HEHE part so u wouldnt think i was upset at anyone. is just fun. just screw all this time stuff. besides its not an argument, its a suggestion. now if u dont agree than ignore me and have a nice day.
RazorCow
10:09 pm | November 5, 2002
Oh my!It should have been "Universal Time", not standard time, grrrr. My mistake.. you don't need to have an argument over that! Hehe. Now, in present time, "UT" or Universal time is decided by the GMT-time. So, 13:00hrs is the same in japan as in alaska.
Silent Giant
11:37 pm | November 4, 2002
and for the silent giant who talks quite a bit (hehe) im not addressing u about standard time so u dont need to tell me anything. this is the comments page, not ur mom, so get used to it. ohhhhhhhhhhhh that one hit where it hurts. Heh, I was practicaly agreeing with you about everything you said excpet for the fact that you don;t agree with what they use in their stories, well write your own story using "saturn time" just to contrdict Razor Cow then if it makes you that angry
Silent Giant
12:26 pm | November 4, 2002
wow, I was very addicted to this story and was screaming "NOOOOOOOOOOOOOO" when I saw the end of the page.Great story,You can't take the details of a fan fiction too seriously because it is THEIR story, what ever they want to have in there no matter how much BS it is can be in there. So I had no problem with standard time and am not part of that MANY people that saturn described who are having trouble comprehending Standard time.It does need to have slight more detail to it. I would have loved to have seen what kinds of booby traps Eve was using. I am very impressed with this story, great job
saturn
5:06 am | November 4, 2002
hey hey, lets not be hostile. my comments were given with good intention. if everybody say'd "i loved it" there would be no ground to build upon. comment boards are open for anything anyone has to say, but u dont HAVE to listen. im not forcing u to abandon standard time, i just personally dont agree with its use in the halo world. and for the silent giant who talks quite a bit (hehe) im not addressing u about standard time so u dont need to tell me anything. this is the comments page, not ur mom, so get used to it.
saturn
11:26 pm | November 2, 2002
oh yea. i didnt say it was bad, just some heads up on a few things. u probably know more about klicks than me..haha. its hard to imagine standard time cause terra rotates and your story doesnt take place-so far- on terra. but whatever. i just thought u could write more if u broke up everything. keep writing.
RazorCow
1:43 pm | November 2, 2002
Saturn; To answer to your post,1. Standard time speaks for itself, doesn't it? Just like we NOW 2002 have, and have had, an international "timeline", which means, no time differences between coutries, for a long time. 2. Apparently it's spelled "klicks". So say my sources, books etc, anyway. I've checked the spelling like 10 times over, and let others read it. If there are any extreme miss-spellings, I appologize.3. If I would just put it together in a big lump of text, with tons of text describing every little thing, the text would only be a pain to read. As I said, Since this is an introdutional text, in which you needed to know why Eve was on the planet etc, I needed to cut it down into a couple of smaller parts, so again, it's easier to understand. Hope that's good enough for you! cheers.
saturn
5:24 am | November 2, 2002
hopefully we can get mor people on this page for u but anyhow, saturn is here.Ok, first thing to MANY people: What the hell is "Standard Time". Think, time is dependant on our presence on Terra. We aren't in Terra are we? I dont blame, it sheepish to follow the book, and most of us are sheep.2nd, check spelling. im not sure about "klicks". but who knows.3rd, you have this well planned i can tell but i would have broke up the events into seperate articles. u have a very good storyline, it just seems rushed. IT LACKS DESCRIPTIVE DETAILS. we all like to imagine spurting blood and severed limbs.PS: we are in a mess with the covies and we're gonna scrap them anyhow. let elmo figure out who started it.
RazorCow
11:30 pm | November 1, 2002
Oh.. yes, Neco, you will get to know that in part 2 probably.Part 1 was just a little "intro"-text =)and.. hmm.. my firewall must have messed up, thought my first post didn't get posted.
Neco Divad
9:36 pm | November 1, 2002
Good job, you got me wondering about ONI's true purpose. Maybe the Covies didn't attack us, maybe we attacked them...
RazorCow
9:04 pm | November 1, 2002
This is my first Halo-story. Enjoy!There's one place in the text where I think the words feel messed up.. where I wrote that ".. an MA5B loaded with AP rounds and equipped.."Yeahwell.. you understand it I think :P
RazorCow
9:04 pm | November 1, 2002
hoho, my first one =)


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