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Comments for 'The Alliance: Part Three'



pooman
11:57 pm | December 12, 2003
ur fat loser eat my poo
apache119
11:48 pm | October 26, 2003
I hate you pooman, either I kill you or you do it yourself. It sure would save me alot of trouble
pooman
7:05 pm | September 16, 2003
thanks H_K 10 wow thats young lol
Hunter_Killer
10:15 am | September 16, 2003
lol im only 10, and I get them out good. :p

Story ain't bad, niether. =)


- Hunter_Killer, devoted anti- SPAMmer, Con Artist, Spoofer, and others like that
pooman
8:11 pm | September 15, 2003
charged* it*

i spelled these wrong in the preview
pooman
8:09 pm | September 15, 2003
sneak preview: The Elite picked her up by the neck and charget his plasma pistol. She knew ot was all over for her.
pooman
6:47 pm | September 15, 2003
i thank you
Sergeant B
12:09 am | September 13, 2003
Why am I so against Spartans? Because using them make your story a little worse, and using a marine as the main character has much more effective Nosolee.
Alpha Lance
9:30 pm | September 12, 2003
Niiiiiicccccccccceeeeee story pooman, 9.8/10. Keep it man.
pooman
6:21 pm | September 12, 2003
in not using spartans thanks for the comments and i did not write this chapter my friend konor did and he will write the next chapter too. then i will write the fifth
Sergeant B
11:35 am | September 12, 2003
Okay, but a little short and crummy. But good. I'm happy that you're not using Spartans in your story. You had a few grammar and spelling errors in the chapter, not much. But the thing is, after a person talks, make a new line. It is better in a writer's view. Good Luck!!
'Nosolee
12:21 am | September 12, 2003
Why are you so against Spartans?!

9.25/20

Why is he so against Spartans?
monitor101
9:45 pm | September 11, 2003
God its good to be back. Great story pooman 9/10 a little short! I propably haven't read the other chapters so I'll be sure to do that.
monitor101
9:45 pm | September 11, 2003
I know I said I was leaving but I can't resist hal fanfiction. This is a place to put what writing talent if any to the test.


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