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Comments for 'Attack on some Human Ship (a comedy)'



Elite Zov
1:48 pm | May 12, 2004
i know i'm late for the party, but man, you actually have a gift!
Nick Kang
11:33 am | April 22, 2004
I'll try to make the next one funnier, even though most of you seem to think it's quality reading.
CoLd BlooDed
10:06 pm | April 21, 2004
Pretty funny, not hilarious, but hey, mine wasn't either on my first try.

Overall, loved it, the part I "loled" on was the part where the Elite lrned englsh! I'm gonna try another comedy soon, it'll be easier using Halo characters. :D
Nick Kang
9:50 pm | April 21, 2004
Woah I didn't think it was gonna be that good.
Horror
7:12 pm | April 21, 2004
ah got the little gold circle dealy thing on your forehead goin? cool!
MC's Cousin
4:05 pm | April 21, 2004
Well, I've seen better (this post infact), but don;t think I'm putting your story down. It was still pretty good. A little too much in some places, but still funny in other places. It actually made me laugh twice (I don't like to laugh-for those who watch SG-1, may face is kinda like Teal'c's [well, not quite])
Anyway...

Signing Off


MCC
Tom
1:14 pm | April 21, 2004
Started out strong with plenty of random crap that I couldn't help laughing at, but it seemed like you were running out of material by the end.
But it was really good. Beats the crap outta mine. :)

"At last! Someone who can write comedy that actually makes you think"

...Are you serious?
Snake Solid 117
12:41 pm | April 21, 2004
That made absolutely no sense at all. That's why it was good. It completely pointless, nothing had much to with somthing else and well, there names are quite good too, ha get it, good, cheese. Forget it. Funny story, write another.
teemus
11:53 am | April 21, 2004
It made me let out a small laugh or two. The part where the marine was flipping through the air made me laugh. keep it up!
someone that you dont know
11:27 am | April 21, 2004
nice nice nice. funny but make the second one funnier. Loved it! Especially the part where the elite just learned english yesterday. LOL. I root for the covies! Go blue stuff! Im waiting for the next one.
Connie
10:46 am | April 21, 2004
At last! Someone who can write comedy that actually makes you think,
'Thats actually funny, unlike the other gay attempts.'
Definitely write another one.
P.S. if anyone pays out this story I'm gonna shoot their dogs
The Illusionist
1:35 am | April 21, 2004
That was the "cheesiest" thing I've ever read. By the the way, this story would be great for someone who is feeling a little bleu. No no no, I got a better one; meet my friend Mr. Jack. His friends call him Monterey. Oh, and his lovely wife Mrs. Valveeta Pasteur. Oh well, gouda luck on the next installment.
Horror
1:12 am | April 21, 2004
hehehehehehehehehehehehehe

ps

hehehe
Sterfrye36
12:41 am | April 21, 2004
All right. It could use improvement. You kept saying, "Oh, wait..." or at least something like that. You could also try using slightly better grammar and punctuation. Remember: A good comedy is a well formatted comedy!
Sentinel
12:30 am | April 21, 2004
Laughter...killing...me. So...much...pain.


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