halo.bungie.org

They're Random, Baby!

Fan Fiction


Comments for 'An Elites Legend: part one'



Disciple75
2:55 am | October 31, 2002
Wow, this is great as well! Man, talk about the creativness. I love stories with creativity and imagination....awesome!!
Neco Divad
9:42 pm | October 29, 2002
Please, if you read my story, post about it.
Neco Divad
8:24 am | October 27, 2002
Neither am I. Acording to my name, I'm a high E1v3n general. My real name is a mixed into that somehow but I'm not telling.
Anonymous
5:33 pm | October 26, 2002
Well, I've been posting for about a month and I'm not letting anyone know who I really am.
Neco Divad
9:09 am | October 26, 2002
Well at least I'm not a Zombie Moose. That would stink. Leteraly. My next story is more like a omnipotent thrird person. Like "Neco walked around the corner not noticing the shadow following him..." I got a page done on the sequal last night. All I got to say. Time to rove the forums. Bye.
IamSpartan
4:53 pm | October 25, 2002
I like it. I think that it would be much better if you made the transition from one entry to another a little more evident. It seems as though the elite was leaving for his mission, then instantly he is back. You should have another time reference between the two entries to make the story a bit more readable.
Neco Divad
1:33 pm | October 25, 2002
I need more sleep. Sorry if I sounded rude.
Neco Divad
10:26 am | October 25, 2002
I've been posting for about 5 months now and I've been visiting this site for about a year. I don't know if that qualifies me as a Newbie or not be what about you? Anonymous is a neat name, How long have you been using it? Are you trying to hide the fact that you to might be a newbie? Hint, don't call people newbies unless you are willing to back up your claim with evidence that you aren't one too. Also, This is about posting comments to my story, like what you think about it. If you wish to call me names, E-Mail me, don't clog up the forum. I must respond the same way as you because you didn't leave me any other choice. I posted this before it was finished because I traveled overseas with it and the nice X-Ray machine added 12 pages to it. I got sick of editing and disided to post this before it's time.Thank you Wado for actually making a comment on it.
Wado
5:56 am | October 25, 2002
Not too bad a start. Keep writing. My suggestion would be to indent each new paragraph to help the formatting look better.
Anonymous
9:54 pm | October 24, 2002
ANOTHER NEWB FREAK!!!! LOOK EVERYONE!!!!! THIS GUY THINKS HE'S COOL!!!!


bungie.org