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Comments for 'An Undying Hope' |
Dispraiser
1:39 pm | March 18, 2003
How... Conformic.... Seems as though someone is new to this game. The fanfic is written great, but the story is lacking...
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gruntkiller
7:32 pm | March 17, 2003
your story has already been done before,theres no innovation, nothing new that stands out. thats what we mean, my suggestion is to sit back and read what other ppl are writing and come up with some idea thats never been tried before. take the tour series for example it may have no action but its interesting and above all nobadies tried it before. Just because you didn't do this story to well doesn't mean that you can't come up with a new idea that could blo the whole fan fic community away like Wado's shadows of Archon series.
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THE AUTHOR
5:21 pm | March 17, 2003
WHAT ELSECAN I FRIGGIN SAY?!?! OK fine, when I start my next chapter I will do better. friggin people . . . .
Oh, and what do you mean by this type of thing has been done?
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Sarge
5:28 pm | March 16, 2003
Easy gk...
He's right about a couple things your grammar will also need some improvements what will kill you is that this type of thing has been done 6000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000 times since the release of halo... so... try something new.
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gruntkiller
6:35 pm | March 15, 2003
this was a pretty unoriginal story, there was not much info to back up what you were telling and for the love of god start a new paragraph when there is a new speaker it makes it a lot easier to understand. oh yah a LOT more discription could of been used.
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