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Comments for 'Marine Rifles, CHAPTER 2'



Marine Black Ops
7:24 pm | October 19, 2003
U know how to do it. Take off every zig. Move zig, move zig....
Kilroy
7:23 pm | October 19, 2003
All Your Base are Belong to us.
Marine Black Ops (the author)
5:24 pm | October 17, 2003
Thanks a lot! I will take your advice with the next chapter. And please, KEEP READING MARINE RIFLES!!!!
javier-again
6:38 pm | October 16, 2003
More i want more, more please.
javier fernandez-vina
1:26 pm | October 16, 2003
It has good solid action.But try to detail it better next time, and make it a little longer.It's good to leave people wanting more but not dissapoint them with a really short story.
SOS.Odin
2:27 am | October 16, 2003
ur crazy Sergeant B
a mad man =D

gj marine
Sergeant B
10:37 am | October 15, 2003
Really good. Tense action fighting. But it could have a little more detail, do you think? Don't just say, "The marine was cut in half." You can say, "The Golden Elite struck the unfortunate marine with his plasma sword and red blood splattered all over him. Luckily, a marine was able to put the Golden Elite to rest with a head shot. The purple blood oozed throughout his body, painting the dirt." Something like that. But it was really good man. Awesome. Good Luck!!


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