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Comments for 'HALO: A New War of Old Enemies Part 1'



me
6:36 pm | May 19, 2004
hello!
Xzilen
12:31 pm | December 23, 2002
I read it lol (the poster below)

Now I'm waiting for the second part still
Berconius
2:05 pm | December 8, 2002
lol, so am I, freshman in fact. I 'll try to write some fan fiction as well but probably not for a while, I'd like to read fall of reach just as a refrence.

A word of wisdom from some one most likely younger than you for Neco Divad, Quantum physics is a great thing to incorperate in to any story, I suggest some classic reading first like the "A brief History of Time" by Stephen Hawking, and "Deep Time" by David Darling. For Sci Fi related material, which is probably better for fan fiction, go with Lawrence M. Krauss's books entitled "The Physics of StarTrek" and his other book "Beyond StarTrek".

Damn, no one's gonna read this, I always post way too late...
Brigad of Marines
12:22 pm | December 7, 2002
Good job man. this is as good as wado's storys. try to put a little bit of comedy in it. i wish that i could be a good writer to right fan fics but it's not my strong suit. i am also doing a report so that slows me down in wrighting even more.
el_halo_diablo
10:03 pm | December 6, 2002
lol alot of us are from highschool. I have open Fourth period, so I get home early and write while there's nobody around
Jeff Graham
1:54 pm | December 6, 2002
I am still in highschool so I can't write the parts as fast I would like too. I will put up the second chapter as soon as possible. Thanks for the feed back.
TiberiusCaesar
12:11 pm | December 6, 2002
Dude, don't listen to anything people are telling you about having to follow the book. Goddamn, do you people just want a whole lot of regurgitations of Fall of Reach? I have not read it, and if I did, I wouldn't incorporate every single little goddamn detail like whether or not the Longsword is a bomber or interceptor. Fan Fiction is MEANT to be fiction. That does not mean to read the book, then spit up facts about it. Make up your own shit.
el_halo_diablo
5:23 am | December 6, 2002
why don't these people i see posting here, post in other fan fics, I'm sure the other authors would appreciate it :). keep up the work Graham!
TiberiusCaesar
4:41 am | December 6, 2002
Sorry, forgot to mention this in my earlier post: This story is one of the better I have read in a while. Excellent job.
Jeff Graham
3:45 am | December 6, 2002
The UPDI are more advanced becasue they have faoght the Covenant before. If they went against the UNSC they would do what the Covenant is now. But they are almost exactly alike in everything else. I will write more. thanks. This is chapter 1.

And El_Diablo it is sad. Thanks agian people.
Bobby Lucas
2:17 am | December 6, 2002
AWESOME!!!! That was a hell of alot better than the first version, but that was awesome too! SO WHAT DOES THAT MAKE THIS?!?!
Ragma
1:57 am | December 6, 2002
Damn this story kicks arse. Not as good as Wados Shadow but for a first chapter it rules. Keep it coming. One question are those humans more powerfull than the UNSC?
Xzilen
11:24 pm | December 5, 2002
One of the best stories I have ever read, the plot elements are mysterious, just like Wado's excellent Shadows series.

Keep it up man.
Knightmare(MM
10:09 pm | December 5, 2002
Nice overhaul. Remind me not to send virtual cookies to the old and new over commenting peoples.
anonymous
9:47 pm | December 5, 2002
To Neco Divad. . . please don't implement "Quantom Physics" in your next story. Not only is it "quantum" physics, but you'll most likely get it wrong anyway. But if you do, please note, quantum physics does not allow for something to be in two places at once. If you're interested please refer to "Introduction to Quantum Mechanics", by David J. Griffiths for proof. There are many other common misconceptions about quantum physics that this book and many others could help you with before you write your story.
el_halo_diablo
8:53 pm | December 5, 2002
wow looking back at the first few posts makes me sick, we need more authors here, and you guys are all fighting, like you're the better fan fic writer know-it-all/commenter, well I like seeing constructive feedback, but then people get all angry at what one says. sad...
Vero
8:39 pm | December 5, 2002
Hmmmmm....interesting story. I liked it. You should really keep on writing. And about that whole fiasco about longswords. NO one cares, it is just a flipping story.
Anonymous
3:26 am | November 30, 2002
When will you write part 2?
Neco Divad
10:41 pm | November 9, 2002
I'm thinking of implamenting Quantom Physics in my next story type. Does this involve any of that?
Solid Snake
6:29 pm | November 8, 2002
The hunter, oh you'll find out. The thing about this is that the convenant and the UPSDC fought about 75 years ago. Most of the enlisted personel don't know what the coveneant are, only special forces and brass, high up brass. When the chief said he was going after a hunter the guy thought was talking abou a 13.5ft tall mobile armor that UPSDC uses; And the sentinels are very similar to master chief. They don't have over shield, they use a seires of plated shield what the jackels have, it provides aboy 3x the protectcion as the over shield but is only in strategic places on the body.I am going to post a revised version. I will wait till I am done with the first chapter and post the whole thing. This is only a part of the chapter, I posted it to get your reactions to it. Thanks for the input.
Wado
5:37 pm | November 8, 2002
Yes, please continue writing. The story was interesting but I got a little confused, maybe because of the grammar. The story plot itself had some real nice elements to it.

So if you wonder what I was confused about... I was confused as to what information was known to the Master Chief and Cortana and what information was purely for the benefit of the reader. For instance, is there really a Hunter on the ship or is that just a mistake made by Cortana? The MC has been told about Sentinels by the other crew member, why does he not question the crew member for more information about what is on the ship?

Nevertheless, keep writing. Good job.

Jeff Graham (Solid Snake)
6:36 am | November 8, 2002
Sorry for my horrablr grammar, it has never been my strong point, plus I yped it rather quickly. I will be posting a reviesed version with he second part of the series. I didn't even plan on doing a second part but since more of you liked it than didn't, I guess I will continue. And about the longsword, it does not matter, it won't be in the tory anymore, or at least for a while, a long while.
Master Chief
3:45 am | November 8, 2002
In the game Cortana distinctly states that there is one more long sword BOMBER in the autumns bay.So there.
Nadsman
11:35 pm | November 7, 2002
This is possibly on of the best storues about Halo written by a fan. very well done and i cant wait for the next one.
Anonymous
12:00 pm | November 7, 2002
Each person can have their own opinion.
Sarge
12:00 pm | November 7, 2002
Now now settle down children does it really matter?
Anonymous
3:02 am | November 7, 2002
I know! Does it Matter? The longsword could be Spy plane for all I care!
anonymous
2:26 am | November 7, 2002
I'd like to see more,oh,& by the way,the Longsword is an interceptor,not a bomber...
Flood impalor
9:58 pm | November 6, 2002
Vayeate, Shut your yap. Ya know, freakin longsword aircraft can be whatever anyone wants. And geeze,the book does NOT tell you every little thing there is, so you dont have any thing good to say, keep your blabber shut. And I really liked this story. lots of interesting things. And I agree with Cool silverthorn. Commas or no commas its still good. Who said you made the criteria Master-magot15
cool silverthorn
9:51 pm | November 6, 2002
Shut up you two. I like this and only geeks and bofs really care about commas and suchlike. Now to the writer, well done and i want to read the next one
masterchief15
7:07 pm | November 6, 2002
Vayeate is right I know of only Intercepters, the Bombers were made up by other amatuer writers. The main reasone why I don't recommend reading this story is because you (The Writer) didn't use any commas or apostrophes. And if you did you didn't use enough so it was rather hard to understand.
Vayeate
4:54 pm | November 6, 2002
I have seen this mistake so many times. You must have read the book because of you otherly great story but a Long sword is NOT a bomber. Long swords are intercepters. i may be wrong. there may be other types of long swords that were not in the book. but the only type of long sword i know is a long sword intercepter.
SnakeSolid
12:01 am | November 30, -0001
This story sux0rs and so does Jeff!


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