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Person
8:44 am | December 25, 2003
Connecting XBOX LIVE. YES!

Gamertag: soundVIRUS
CoLd BlooDed
3:49 am | December 25, 2003
4 Hours for me, or in military time, 0400 Hours until Christmas.
Person
2:17 am | December 25, 2003
5 hours and 27 minutes
Person
11:24 pm | December 24, 2003
8 hours and 14 minutes til Christmas!
'Nosolee
7:30 pm | December 24, 2003
Yeah, many fresman I see, I feel too old to be here, **sigh**, being a sophomore aint easy.

Good poem, ignoring everyone else's comments and the one thing is that the plural form of Covenant is Covenant, not Covenants. Unless your speaking about multiple pacts with God.
Mainevent
5:39 pm | December 24, 2003
I was born on Christmas.

At 8:43 PM.

I ruined my mom's Christmas Dinner.

Oh yea, who da man!

And I only get regular gifts, cuz I celebrate my birthday on a separate day.
CoLd BlooDed
5:06 pm | December 24, 2003
Can't believe Mainevent and Walker are only 14, with Main turning 15 soon.

I have to start getting better at writing, hahaha.
Cohenour
2:35 pm | December 24, 2003
Free verse isn't my favorite poetry style, poetry in general gives me a headache and the need to break something. War is as basic an instinct as reproduction, so no one started it. It does seem anti-war, at least for my tastes.
CoLd BlooDed
12:54 pm | December 24, 2003
I'm thirteen. Im officially a teen, *thumbs up*.
Walker
12:53 pm | December 24, 2003
Me and Mainevent are 14. Unless he had a birthday. I'm pretty sure Alpha Lance is, too. So don't feel left out.

Semper Fi

-Walker
CoLd BlooDed
12:51 pm | December 24, 2003
Critism is only for you to get better, dude. Don't tell someone to shut the fuck up after they tell you what you should've done.

Critism is for your own good. But it was a decent poem, but what Mainevent said, its too related to todays world.
Person
12:49 pm | December 24, 2003
Im an idiot
Person
12:49 pm | December 24, 2003
Well im back. (god im lonely) Anyways I was wondering how old are all you writers. please answer: Walker, coviekila, superr1216 and anyone else. Cus i think i'm pretty much about 10 years yunger than everyone cuz im the only one who is a stupid jackass. PS im 12 years old. Not even a teen. TELL ME HOW OLD YOU ARE!!!!!!!!
Walker
12:47 pm | December 24, 2003
I find that so many curse words in order are used to fill up space when the author's empty head is expressed.
Person
12:44 pm | December 24, 2003
Sorry all the things I said. If I insulted anyone I didn't mean it, it was just really funny how he said all that stuff. Thats cool when people have arguments. And Dustin, i really did like your poem. And Walker, coviekila, superr1216,you guys are awesome too. (I just dont want too take sides here) well. THATS MY MOMMA!
Person
12:38 pm | December 24, 2003
God people! why are you being so mean to him. I think his poem was good. I mean you can at least say some nice things like "Poem wasn't as good as I thought but it was a good try". Mainevent is the only one that gave a good review. And Dustin that was cool about what you said to all those people, no offense: Walker, coviekila, superr1216, but it was pretty funny seeing someone cus someone out. I should shut-up now. Good Poem though! :)
Awacar
10:39 am | December 24, 2003
Everyone seem to be in the 8th grade here, are we the only persons that find our way to this site?
Person
6:33 am | December 24, 2003
Im a small little 7th grader.
Person
6:24 am | December 24, 2003
Man Mainevent, your born in Christmas. That's double the Gifts. Unless your B-day is on the 26th because it sais it's the 24th when you post your message. I live in California so Christmas is in two days. Damn you people in NEW YORK! Just Kidding! Well you guys get to open presents 3 hours before us, unless your jewish. Hanukah already begun. Damn! I have to wait exactly 25 hours and 28 minutes to get XBOX LIVE and COUNTER STRIKE and A ETHERNET CABLE and A ROUTER and CRIMSON SKIES and I could finally play RAINBOW SIX 3 on XBOX LIVE!! yay!
CoLd BlooDed
5:55 am | December 24, 2003
Awesome Main, ur born on Christmas!

I'm in the eight grade currently, middle school.
Person
4:00 am | December 24, 2003
Cool. But im only 12. *sigh*
Alpha Lance
3:13 am | December 24, 2003
I'm 14, I'll be 15 January 23, 2004. I'm in the 8th grade as well.
Mainevent
2:19 am | December 24, 2003
I'm a Freshman in High School. And I'll be turning 15 in two days. OH YEA
Person
1:09 am | December 24, 2003
I see. So you guys are like in High school. Or are you in Junior High
Person
1:07 am | December 24, 2003
OH. I thought you guys were like 18 or something. God I was way off.
GC-117
11:33 pm | December 23, 2003
And by the way, I dont think this is the best title for your poem. lol
GC-117
11:28 pm | December 23, 2003
"Walker, i aint some anti war person you peice of shit you also get the fuck away from me. I acually like war and shit its cool."
- How old is this guy....5? Yeah and I agree with what every1 else has already said, its website for Halo fan-fic, its not a website for hippies. So change your writing subjects or " git".
Alpha Lance
10:20 pm | December 23, 2003
Damn you n00b. CovieKilla said it was good. Damn. Don't get all pissed off at him. Besides, this was kind of something like a anti-war thing. Shit, if you can't take these kind of comments, then get the hell out. Also, don't get mad at Walker, he is a damn vetren writer that is one of the most helpful. Another thing, this kind of shit you are saying is going to make you look like a damn ass that no one cares about. If you don't like these kind of comments, too bad. If you think this sucks, then don't write, if your not going to write about Halo relative stuff, then don't come here. People here aren't going to be easy on you, so get use to it.

Do excuse me, I do have a anger problem, and I do hate when you talk about my fellow HBOers like that.
Awacar
8:48 pm | December 23, 2003
Hey, dustin, slow down. I'll have too agree with you, you may not want people to make fun of you or your work, who has? They told you their oppinion, and indirectly what they think needs to be done, like relating more to Halo, this was a bit off Halo, I think. read the text between the '[sarcasm]' and '[/sarcasm]' in Mainevents first post, it's saying everything for me about realting to Halo.

Okay, you may be a miserable person(i'm starting to think you are), but if you submit a poem to a site as this one, you have to get that it is oppinions that is sent to you, not small, kind puppy dogs. Everyone has different taste, and if every person on Earth would read it, there's no possibility that everyone likes it, even if the name of the author is Mainevent, Wado, Jillybean, etc, etc. I hope you're getting what I'm saying.

You wrote that you wanted to see what 'idiotic remarks' this poem would get. In your oppinion, you must have got some idiotic remarks, happy?

If not, write a decent work in the eyes of the HBO:ers, then you will get positive reactions. You tell Walker and Coviekilla to 'get the hell out of here', but don't even bother to spell their names right. And if you really think that a poem 'sux', why post it? It takes place when people are trying to get to something decent to read, and people get angry when they read crap. Haven't said that your poem was, but readers seem to think that.
dustin
7:34 pm | December 23, 2003
oh yea uh, who is it? oh yea coviekilla or something like that if you hate my poem so much,m then get your crap off of my stuff. I dont need peises of shit like you to make fun of my work. Im already a miserable person and stuff oh yea Walker, i aint some anti war person you peice of shit you also get the fuck away from me. I acually like war and shit its cool. Im just trying some stupid poetry for some stupid reason and i wanted to see what kind of idiotic remarks are made about it.I hate all of you WAlker, coviekila, superr1216, get the fuck out of here. But mainevent, your kool, you can stay. Thx mainevent and fuck off all the oyther people.
Mainevent
7:27 pm | December 23, 2003
It's just too related to today for it to be considered Halo.

George Bush
Saddam

UNLESS

In the future, Dubya's clone rules the UNSC!
dustin
7:25 pm | December 23, 2003
i did mention covenant in one of the stanzas. Besides, i was just trying out a different type of peotry and see ho it goess and stuff. I think this poem sux
CovieKilla
7:03 pm | December 23, 2003
Is it just me, or is this place for Halo? Hmm...maybe I missed a sign....It was a good poem and all, but please post things that only relate to Halo.
Walker
6:24 pm | December 23, 2003
Even Ghandi said "When the choice is between cowardice and violence, I would advise violence." He also said that the blackest deed performed during the British rule of India was depriving the people of their weapons. Just a side note.

Semper Fi

-Walker
Superr1216
5:55 pm | December 23, 2003
Play more halo feed the agressive side of your passive personality and trust me you will feel better about war because no matter how many "poems" and I use that term losely, You write it will not change.
Mainevent
5:51 pm | December 23, 2003
[sarcasm]He used the word Covenant damnit. That OBVIOUSLY makes it a Halo fic. Gah Walker...your so blind.[/sarcasm]

Try the shift button once in a while...
Walker
4:23 pm | December 23, 2003
This is a place for Halo works, not a piece of pacifist anti-war crap. Make it about Halo, or get out.

Semper Fi

-Walker


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