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Comments for 'The Corporal: Part 1' |
Capo Rip
5:46 am | January 22, 2004
What would REALLY help would be some good paragraph spacing - makes it much easier on the eye as one tries to read.
The other thing is, with those marines pinned down by the Covies on Basalt, it's unrealistic that they were stuck there all day because if they stayed in one location that long and the enemy KNEW it they would flank the marines and/or send air support to kill them all.
Good grammar and sentences, though.
IONCLAD!
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FOrunnER
4:43 am | January 22, 2004
Dont worry about it Scribe. The story is inconsistent with Halo: CE and Halo: FS, but it's still good. Not all stories have to follow the main plot line to the letter.
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Hawk7886
4:07 am | January 22, 2004
Heh, there is so much you don't understand. I'm not even going to try to explain it to you. . .
Although, if you say that she only turns blue when cracking Covenant code, well, I can't argue with you, since your pocket protector scares me.
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The Scribe
5:01 am | January 21, 2004
Don't worry about it Master Grunt. It wasn't your comment that set me off. I like crtitsism, because it helps me to write better and know what my readers want. It was Hawk's comment that pissed me off. I don't see how the whole story could be ruined because of that mistake. And Helljumper, I like that you commented, but next time TELL me why you couldn't get into it. However, I do apprieciate you for taking the time to comment.
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Mastergrunt
12:31 pm | January 19, 2004
Whoa, calm down scribe I didn't mean to offend you I was just pointing out a simple mistake. Afterall nobody gets better without making mistakes.
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The Scribe
8:15 pm | January 18, 2004
Did it REALLY ruin the WHOLE story?? It's just a fucking introduction anyway. Did you REALLY sit there and read the story thinking, "Gee, this whole series sucks because one of the marines didn't die on Halo." Just foreget about the goddamned mistake. Blank it out. Don't even read the intorduction. Just forget it. Just know that there is a Corporal Harris. That's it. Just forget it. Man, some of you people sound like a bunch of nerds who make a fuckin video game your whole life. I can just see you now, picking stupid mistakes from stories: "Well, actually, (adjusts taped-together thick glasses), Cortana doesn't turn blue unless she's trying to crack a Covenant code (staightens pocket protector)". You fuckers make me sick.
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The Scribe
12:47 pm | January 18, 2004
Yes, okay, so I made a mistake. Just look past the damn thing and really read the story. Good Christ.
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Hawk7886
1:03 am | January 18, 2004
That mistake ruined the whole story. . .
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Helljumper
6:40 pm | January 17, 2004
I just couldn't get into it.
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Mastergrunt
4:57 pm | January 17, 2004
No offense but the pillar of autumn was the only unsc ship around halo. So therefore your corporal would have been blowin to heck like all the other marines and covenant on halo.
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