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 Comments for 'the jackal brothers:episode 1' |  
 
 
		
			| CoLd BlooDed 6:24 am | January 24, 2004
 Its literally one big ass sentence...
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			| Hawk7886 12:00 pm | January 18, 2004
 Holy Crap. How old are you exactly?
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			| Sentinel 5:53 am | January 18, 2004
 What the hell is this?
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			| OMG!!!! 5:24 am | January 18, 2004
 There are like 50 comas in one sentence!
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			| §FF§Echo 5:21 am | January 18, 2004
 Free the grunts, oh, wait, i mean, you suck dude!!!! Go with da flow! Whatever that means!
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			| Alpha Lance 5:08 am | January 18, 2004
 OMFG!!!
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			| Awacar 9:22 pm | January 17, 2004
 Uuhhh... *feels like somebody throwed ice-cold water on me*
 
 read the criteria that Louis put up, and try to follow the advises given, check other stories out and see what they do good, and copy that. Then people can start to critisize your work properly, but until that, please do something else. Comply, or get the HBO:ers very angry.
 
 Sorry, but it looks like the author have a lack of common sense. Please, Please change this way of writing.
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			| Mainevent 6:29 pm | January 17, 2004
 I thought Louis posted criteria for stories in the last batch.
 
 This one defies all of them...
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