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Comments for 'The Virus Part 4' |
scope
11:31 am | June 8, 2003
Well dont say he is afraid
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Steele
1:08 am | June 8, 2003
I didn't think you were insulting me, Red. I just wanted to point out that I wasn't afraid (what would I have to be afraid of???)!
As for correct grammar; correct grammar is a sign of professionalism. Maybe one day there will be a Halo Fanfic archive with strict rules and beta-readers and all that such. Incorrect grammar, sloppy work, and whatever else is just bad.
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Red
7:28 pm | June 7, 2003
I wasn't insulting Steele.... At least I wasn't trying to.
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scope
1:10 pm | June 7, 2003
A-men I dont like goin of on people but I do when you start insulting people who have been nice to me. Like Steele
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monitor101
5:13 am | June 7, 2003
Ok lets settle down these are comments for the love of god just calm down. I was just defending my story . Well it is true I am quick of take the offensive and defend it with all I've got and Red if you ever want to battle it out verbel or physical let my know. And your face is going to be red if you don't shut the hell up. I rest my case unless Red wants to bring it up again.
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HunterKiller
4:23 am | June 7, 2003
Hey Red you Cunt licker! We're united as halo freeks! And these are Fuckin Comments! Who gives a DAMN about grammar!
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Steele
10:03 pm | June 6, 2003
I'm not AFRAID! I just prefer to keep most of my comments civil on the internet. I also try to give constructive criticism.
Besides if I see something really screwed up, and I don't think there is any potential, I just don't post.
I try to be nice to people; I only say anything offensive when someone bothers me. (I probably sound like a pansy, but I don't really care, no one will call me that to my face)!
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Red
11:18 am | June 6, 2003
Your Version:
Damn right Red you fag you can suck my white ass bitch! I wrote this in a hurry so back off.
Correct Version:
Damn right, Red, you fag, you can suck my white ass, bitch! I wrote this in a hurry so back off.
The fix:
"I wrote this in a hurry so back off."
"some grammar problems, but they are easy fixable"
Don't write this in a hurry next time. Take your time... If you were to merely read it over aloud you could pick out many of these errors. Also, I am done with this series, don't expect any more posts from me at least...
Some Problems:
"but the grammar was, well, I'm not going to comment."
Poor Steele here is AFRAID to post what he thinks about your fanfic fearing your reply. Controlling the speech of others seems very communist like to me. Mind if I call you my Red Buddy?
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scope
10:30 am | June 6, 2003
Dont u fucking diss Steeleu crack ass fuck. I would be perfictly happy to blow ur ass up in HALO online anytime.Anywhere.
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monitor101
5:02 am | June 6, 2003
Well red fuck off off do I care ummmm no. Ok ok people my next one should be better I hope I can make it up.
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Agent Shade
5:58 pm | June 5, 2003
man, Halo 2 is going to rule Steele, hurry and get the E3 trailer.
as for your story monitor, i've loved this series from the start. i admit, there was some grammar problems, but they are easy fixable, so dun worry, keep it up
8.5/10
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Steele
3:43 pm | June 5, 2003
Monitor's very quick to take offense! The story was pretty good, but the grammar was, well, I'm not going to comment. Anyway, keep it up, this is a pretty good series.
Has anyone seen the Halo2 Demo from E3? I'm downloading it off Kazaa, but its taking forever. What I've seen so far is awesome, though!
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monitor101
12:41 pm | June 4, 2003
Well Havok Red as I said can kiss my ass. Scope I am sorry to say that this is a one time deal it will be a couple more weeks before this series is up again.
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Havok
11:08 am | June 4, 2003
the grammar wasnt so bad that it took away from the story. i liked this post a lot. cant wait to see where this goes. Red is a stickler for grammar and little details, so maybe touch up the next one a little bit to make him happy
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monitor101
4:03 am | June 4, 2003
Damn right Red you fag you can suck my white ass bitch! I wrote this in a hurry so back off.
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Red
6:30 pm | June 3, 2003
9.5? Heh... Your grammar is terrible, things like capitalization should never be messed up, no indents and very short, underdescriptive paragraphs... Sorry, but 7/10 is all I could muster up. I know that when reading this comment you will think "Suck my ass" and then post it, so don't.
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scope
6:27 pm | June 3, 2003
9.5/10 Bout time this god damn series came back
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