Comments for 'The First Step Into A Long Fall Part 1'
Jaywhit10
8:58 pm | April 30, 2002
Interesting story,somehow part of it remminds me of my first stories but written a hell of a lot better. Need to seperate the dialouge from the descriptive paragraphs though. Also elites don't die in one sniper shot I think it takes one to kill the shield and another to kill the Elite. Anywho this is gonna be a good story and keep it up
