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Comments for 'Halo: The MCconto Chronicles (2nd)' |
JCDenton
1:01 pm | August 4, 2003
my story is going to get much different, in the way, that it is not only the MCconto who is allways winning and so on, but I will throw in much more... I have brainstormed while gaming Morrowind on XBOX, and I got mayor ideas who will boost my story. please give your comments about Part 3 who is released allready...
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Jinkaiden-XI
11:42 am | August 3, 2003
I'm sorry about that. I'm so confused now I have lost large amounts of hair due to my frusteration...
Anyway, the grammar needs major work. I would imagine that all word Proccessor programs would have some form of spellcheck, but I have never seen a Dutch computer program. I assume they are extremely different from what I use down here in mighty ol' Texas...
I can tell your trying hard, and it's only the grammar and format that need work. Don't change the plot or anything else unless you want to heavily scar this story.
Not to discourage you or anything, but best stories are in fact hard to come up with. But really, they're not that rare here. I can tell you that some simple work with the minor details will bump your series to grade 'A' material in no time.
I'm liking it so far, but I honestly have to read it twice before I understand half of what is written.
Great work so far! 8/10.
Jinkaiden-XI
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Jinkaiden-XI
11:36 am | August 3, 2003
Okay, I need some info.
The new way to send in fiction confuses me a bit. When I enter the name on the submission form, is that what it will really be labeled as when it's posted?
I want to know because the second name I gave it (assuming that is the one that is hardcoded or whatever) is something more like a designation code rather than a title.
No, nevermind...I shouldn't worry. If these newcomers can do it, I shouldn't have a problem.
Okay, the first part of my newest series is coming if it isn't too short, which I highly doubt it is. (It'll be close.)
Chapter II is coming soon and Chapters II and IV are written as a rough draft but nothing else. The ideas for Chapter V are piling up.
Jinkaiden-XI
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JCDenton
2:22 pm | August 1, 2003
I made all the fixes and from part 3 to the last Part I will have minimal grammar problems. lets compete with the other story of S7N!! ;) and others of course.
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Spookybanana29
8:56 am | August 1, 2003
The grammar in this wasn't that good...but the actual story is pretty good. You should run it through Microsoft Word spell-check or something before you submit it to HBO, that would make some of the sentences more UNDERSTANDABLE, because some of your sentences took me a while before i understood what they ment.
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JCDenton
8:29 am | August 1, 2003
you better dont guess my storyline good bro! ;)
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scope
12:59 am | August 1, 2003
On last thing. I dont think anyone has ever writtin a story a bout a hunter? If so can you tell me.
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scope
12:39 am | August 1, 2003
I was reading the very first few HALO storys, and to be honest EVERYTHING about them sucked. Even the titles. And a few of the people that posted where on something. I swear.....
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Ishkabibbl
7:57 pm | July 31, 2003
'What qutoation marks do you to?'
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scope
5:36 pm | July 31, 2003
7.5/10 Well....grammer needs to be worked on...alot.
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monitor101
5:31 pm | July 31, 2003
True the grammer was bad but the idea was awasome and delivered a good read the whole Haag and LAARL or whatever was cool! 8/10 nice!
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Agent Shade
4:41 pm | July 31, 2003
i admit, the grammar was still bad, but the plot and idea of your story is great...just work on problems like seperating your paragraphs, capital letters at a new sentence and indenting when someone new talks
keep trying 7.5/10
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Skippy-dippy-doo-bop
3:34 pm | July 31, 2003
If you're past the fourth grade, and you still use grammar like this...well, it's just sad.
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Skippy-dippy-doo-bop
3:32 pm | July 31, 2003
How old are you? The grammar in this is horrible.
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JCDenton
12:45 pm | July 31, 2003
Part 3 is allmost finished! I will post it right away now! be sure to give comments on it please.
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JCDenton
12:45 pm | July 31, 2003
Part 3 is allmost finished! I will post it right away now! be sure to give comments on it please.
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JCDenton
12:45 pm | July 31, 2003
I just posted the 3rd part and we have to wait before the entry is approved. sorry for all the grammar problems, I am trying really hard to make no mistake in my story. I will ask a few americans to check all the grammar problems to finish it good, before really finish it. look at t like a 'beta' version of the complete story. but keep it up in reading it, I will post a lot parts. anyone interested in working with me, you can email me at MCJCD@hotmail.com. as I heared of you, my story is good, and i will correct all the grammar mistakes with your help if you like, and then, I might have one of the best story's around here when its finished completely,because I try something else then Earth in central. standby for changes.
JCDenton
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JCDenton
12:45 pm | July 31, 2003
ok I learned about it and I just started to add much more detail and trying to make great good sentences. you will see in part 4, I made it clear.
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