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Comments for 'No Other Alternative Part 1' |
Avirez
10:37 pm | July 16, 2004
Watsaru again.. copied someone elses work (again)? or did you actually make this horrible pos?
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Unknown
5:04 pm | April 9, 2004
I read the first few And I thought it wasn't that bad. Plus I tokk the liberty of ACTUALLY READING THE REST. If you don't have anything positive to say before you read it all,then don't say it. K bub?
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Nick Kang
7:46 pm | April 4, 2004
I'm melting! I'm melting! I can feel my brain rotting from the inside! I got to the eleventh makeshoft sentence, and then began getting a headache. Two spaces after punctuation, one space after a comma. Separate dialogue.
EXAMPLE: BAD
"We need covering fire!" shouted Sgt. Johnson. "Roger that, Sarge" replied Corporal Locklear. "Two Elites, comin' right!" yelled Haverson.
EXAMPLE: GOOD
"We need covering fire!" shouted Sgt. Johnson.
"Roger that, Sarge!" replied Corporal Locklear.
"Two Elites, comin' right!" yelled Haverson.
Your dialogue is kinda melted together.
-20/10
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PaYnE
6:43 pm | April 4, 2004
same here
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Helljumper
2:45 am | April 4, 2004
I hate stories with SPARTANS in it, but thats just me. I didn't get pass the first sentence.
ODST
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Sentinel
11:15 am | April 3, 2004
My eyes! MY EYES!
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Wiley
10:39 pm | April 2, 2004
*sentences
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Wiley
10:37 pm | April 2, 2004
Horrible, plain and simple. I read the first few "sentances" and nearly puked....
-10/10
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